Due on Monday, May 14 for M/W eng classes

Hey all,

We need to start making our proposals to look like real proposals...with color, and pics, and graphs, etc...

so for monday,

pls bring a version of your proposal that is set up to look like a real proposal...

with a cover letter, table of contents, budget, the Qs answered, etc......

look at the original assignment to refresh your memory about what the diff Qs are...

see you monday...

Wed class... nite class ....1A bad ass classs

here is what we are doing....

1. we need to have all our art projects done by next Wed, the 9th of May.
2. You need to put your paper #2, (the interview paper) up in google docs tonight, then share it with me--   smcfarland2011@gmail.com  ....   You need to proof the paper as best you can tonight--then I will go behind you and clean up any last issues..
3. You need to send me your revised Paper #3 answers to Qs1,2,4,5 ---after we look at them tonight..
4. For the map you need to send me: pics/language/location for the 4 categories that we have--

Stories – (THIS ONE SHOULD BE EASY--bc all your people have a story)When you click on a dot it will show a photo of a community member or something about the community member and some quotes from interviews with the person--you can pick 2-3 quotes from the person... just take it out of your essay or your transcript
History – (ALOT OF PEOPLE TALKED ABOUT THINGS THAT HAVE GONE AWAY... this can be big things like Kaiser, or small things --as long as your person talked about it.. or you can include something here that YOU notice is gone) When you click on a dot it will show an old photo (or a current photo of a vacant lot) and description of a historical event or a feature that used to be in the neighborhood, but is now gone
Assets – (WHAT DID YOUR PERSON TALK ABOUT THAT IS A GOOD THING) When you click on a dot it will show a photo and description of an existing community asset, like a popular park or hangout--
Aspirations – (WHAT DID YOUR PERSON TALK ABOUT THAT THEY WANT TO HAVE HAPPEN IN SOUTH HAYWARD)​When you click on a dot it will show a description of a something a community member wants to see at that particular location, with a sample photo when possible

Tips for how to proof read

First off, it's not really proof reading... its proof looking...

You are looking really carefully at your paper. You will need to take your time, because it takes time. You should figure 10 to 15  minutes per page.
One tip for slowing you down: You should assume that every sentence has a problem.
Think about this: it should take almost as long to proof a paper that has NO errors as it does to proof a paper with a lot of errors. Why is this?
You might want to print a hard copy so that you are not proofing off of a computer screen.
You might want to grow the font so you can see more easily.
If you have long paper to proof, you should break up the proofing into 2-3 different times.
Don't proof when you are tired.
Don't proof at the last minute. (This means you need to get the paper done early enough to give you time to proof.)



Now that you are ready to proof, here is the key:

Read outloud, read slowly, let your ear hear the errors
read exact what you you see.

What are the GOALS of all this:
make you responsible--not your teacher, not your lover, not your tutor---YOU. (If you KNOW that you have problems, with, commas, you, need, to, make, it, your, mission, to, fix, it. )
By proofing carefully, you will begin to know YOUR errors.
Find (by yourself) at least 70 % of the errors by yourself.
Then 15% is on the teacher to teach you.
The last 10 to 15% who cares...--